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I enjoyed the restless rhythm of this piece. It feels almost like spoken-word jazz, where images tumble into one another and language leads the movement. There’s a playful intensity here that keeps the poem alive from beginning to end.
Thank you Antonio
It’s fun to transform surroundings into poetry
I really liked this, the rhythm and rhyme, choice of words too, which add to a sense of anger and lend it an intense burn. Fabulous stuff.
Thank you Gary totally had the fire and was looking to burn
“a proper twinkle
when stars align
more than once.
Brutal, rugged, far too raw
bruised apple, minor flaw” - in love with the entire stanza. Every single word is placed strategically. Perfect, Gub x
Damn thank you MoTy!
You just hit us with the tobacco and staccato rhyme and walked off like it was nuthin.
Great job.
Aha! Too much smoking may cause this
Thanks so much Buzz!
Great poem! I can feel the anger rising between the words. Great work!
Yesss thank you Nick :) you got me I’ve got volcano energy
Beautiful rhythm and so many unexpected words next to each other 💚
Thank you! I think it came from using the visuals of the actual surroundings and mixing them with my feelings
I enjoyed the restless rhythm of this piece. It feels almost like spoken-word jazz, where images tumble into one another and language leads the movement. There’s a playful intensity here that keeps the poem alive from beginning to end.
Thank you Antonio
It’s fun to transform surroundings into poetry
I really liked this, the rhythm and rhyme, choice of words too, which add to a sense of anger and lend it an intense burn. Fabulous stuff.
Thank you Gary totally had the fire and was looking to burn
“a proper twinkle
when stars align
more than once.
Brutal, rugged, far too raw
bruised apple, minor flaw” - in love with the entire stanza. Every single word is placed strategically. Perfect, Gub x
Damn thank you MoTy!
You just hit us with the tobacco and staccato rhyme and walked off like it was nuthin.
Great job.
Aha! Too much smoking may cause this
Thanks so much Buzz!
Great poem! I can feel the anger rising between the words. Great work!
Yesss thank you Nick :) you got me I’ve got volcano energy
Beautiful rhythm and so many unexpected words next to each other 💚
Thank you! I think it came from using the visuals of the actual surroundings and mixing them with my feelings