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While I Grieve's avatar

The alliteration in this first stanza does something astounding. I want to read it over and over just to feel the sound of it in my mouth.

Gub's avatar

Thanks so much! I must say that I said it out loud while driving in an almost witch-like tone

While I Grieve's avatar

Aahh, like a spell. I hadn’t seen that. But I suppose I did feel a sort of invocation, so I was on the right lines!

Nick Hills's avatar

"let go the rope which keeps you bound" great line and great poem, mate! Have a wonderful Saturday!

Gub's avatar

Thank you!

Night Cracks's avatar

Lovely rhythm. Felt almost like a lullaby 💚

Gub's avatar

Thank you, almost, because would you read that to your kids?? lol!

I had the nursery rhyme voice in my head, not all light not all dark

Night Cracks's avatar

They don't understand English, so why not? 😅

The rhythm works great, so why not to sing it 💛

Emily S Hurricane's avatar

Damnnnn the cadence to this is boss 🤘🤘

Gub's avatar

😊 thank you, just the voices in me head this time